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PROJECT – 01- ADVANCE 09
OBESITY
The diseases in the World are many; they attack us outside and inside the body. We can get any of these from the air ,a person, unhealthy conditions, etc. The consequences can be bad in many cases,but one of the more common diseases is the obesity.
First of all the causes of the obesity are many but the main reasons are first, the genetic inheritance. If your father was fat and your grandfather was equal fat you will be like them, it is genetic but can be offset.
The other reason is the most important. The kina of diet you have decides your weight, if you eat a lot of food and you do not exercise your would be fat. The best thing you can do is to have a good diet and make exercise often. The diet and exercise are necesary for a good health.
Having read these rehaznos that can affect everybody here are the consequences and they are not good.
One of the consequences is the increase of grease in the body. With the style of life you have your weight will increase and this is bad for your health, you can suffer a heart attack and in the bad of the cases you can die. The obesity is nothing funny you have to take it serious.
The second consequence is similar; the obesity can carry other complications. For example, it can affect your circulatory system, the endocrine system and also psychological damages. When it attacks to the system the problems can be until the death, but when it is psychological damage it can depress you and is worse in another way.
In conclusión , the obesity is a very serious problem that can be hereditary or can depend of your style of life, the consequences are devastating until cause you death, you have to take care with this.
NAME ; NELLY JUAREZ BUENDIA
Nelly,
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A.R.